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After days of stalling i was finally motivated to add another chapter being motivated to do more after see the works of others. I really wanted to introduce the elements of magic that had been missing entirely from the first couple chapters other than the prolouge. I wanted to put down a basis as to how magic would work without setting down set rules but still limited the amount of magical power someone could use based on multiple factors. Like i said, i promise to introduce more OC's as much as i can but i think i wanna set down LT as a main character to interact with ( Thanks KimmyBro for letting me use your OC again.) so LT's basically gonna be one of Areikahx's best friends. Also while writing this i tried to make adjustments to my writing style as well as try to write for longer periods of time so that i would try to make new chapters more frequently than what I've been doing. I hope to have fun with this. Thanks everyone. 
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Wow. 9 months a deviant and you have more watchers than I do. Must be doing something right.
Your writing here reminds me of me when I started. Which is to say that you seem inexperienced, not that our styles are the same at all. You do a good job of portraying tone in your writing, without a doubt, but I found it hard to get invested in the overall narrative. If I find a way to properly pin down and describe why, I'll be sure to let you know. To keep it as a brief summary: your works are relatively short, your dialogue has great tone but sort of feels hamfisted or forced more often than not, and the overall narrative doesn't grab absolutely everyone. Like I said, you must be doing something right to have so much attention, but I personally am not drawn to this style of storytelling I guess. Either way, I hope you find ways to improve and continue.
Your writing here reminds me of me when I started. Which is to say that you seem inexperienced, not that our styles are the same at all. You do a good job of portraying tone in your writing, without a doubt, but I found it hard to get invested in the overall narrative. If I find a way to properly pin down and describe why, I'll be sure to let you know. To keep it as a brief summary: your works are relatively short, your dialogue has great tone but sort of feels hamfisted or forced more often than not, and the overall narrative doesn't grab absolutely everyone. Like I said, you must be doing something right to have so much attention, but I personally am not drawn to this style of storytelling I guess. Either way, I hope you find ways to improve and continue.